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clevermanka ([personal profile] clevermanka) wrote2019-09-08 08:43 am
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Sunday Six

Many thanks to everyone who chimed in on my Plotting Is Terrible post yesterday. I feel better about it, now, and have some idea of things I want to try. If they work, I'll go back and fiddle with some of the earlier scenes I already sent to beta when I'm further along in the story.

For today's snippet, the beginning of Zhao Yunlan and Shen Wei's first conversation in the Ghost Story AU.

Part of him couldn’t believe he was doing this. What sort of rational adult stood in an empty staircase, trying to talk to a ghost? But that part had been getting quieter since Thursday. He was grateful to his mom for teaching him that the unseen didn’t have to be frightening.

“In case you can’t talk, we’ll do one knock for yes, two knocks for no. Um, first off, I guess, can you talk?”

He could barely breathe around his heart pounding enormously through his entire torso. Receiving no immediate response, he began counting. On the count of five, two light but definite knocks sounded just past the top of the stairs. He grabbed the handrail as his knees went weak. Feeling foolish, he realized his other hand was clutching his chest over his heart. So people actually do that, he thought. Good to note for writing. He swallowed around a dry mouth, and the next question came out in a hoarse whisper.

“Will you hurt me if I come up?”

Two knocks.

“Do you want me to come up?”

Silence. He counted. On three, one knock. Yes.

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[personal profile] jo_lasalle 2019-09-08 02:49 pm (UTC)(link)
AWWWWWWWW! That is adorable and I want moar!!
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[personal profile] umadoshi 2019-09-08 08:19 pm (UTC)(link)
“Will you hurt me if I come up?”

Two knocks.

“Do you want me to come up?”

Silence. He counted. On three, one knock. Yes.


Eeeee!
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[personal profile] naye 2019-09-08 09:14 pm (UTC)(link)
So tense and magical! (Or ghostly? But no. Making contact with the unseen - that really does sound magical.)